Doubts about my english teachers marking abilities….

Hey guys! My english teacher found out she was getting let go the week she started marking our mocks and even has admitted to us she doesn’t mark for the exam board and was very strict and mean when marking these so i’ve become doubtful in her marking abilities with her clearly stressed mindset!! The tear drops on some peoples papers makes it clear that maybe a second opinion may be useful!

She tried to give me a grade 5 for this piece and i just have to say I am not convinced! Was looking for a bit of guidance on what grade you think this 34 marker (4 SPaG marks) would get and any general advice or improvements you may have! (I’m dyslexic so sorry about any spelling mistakes, oops)